http://www.eliteskills.com/u/zyllion The writings and poetry of zyllion. en-us Sun, 22 Nov 2009 08:07:02 -0600 Sun, 22 Nov 2009 08:07:02 -0600 Elite Generator http://www.eliteskills.com/z/49170 I rarely write love poems, but for some reason this one has really stuck out for me as an emotional one (at least for one of my love poems). Still, feedback would be greatly appreciated. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/52224 This is slightly based off of a prompt I saw that said "What would you do if you lived in a perfect world?" Well, I didn't exactly write it as thugh I lived in a perfect world, I will admit that, it's written a lot more about what that perfect world could/would be like. Any comments are welcome, and if you decide to try that prompt, let me know; I'd love to see how yours turns out. Oh, and this is most definitely my first draft, so if there are any mistakes please, Please, PLEASE tell me! http://www.eliteskills.com/z/51394 This has been edited! This is not passion as in loving passion. This refers to the passion of an action; in this case my passion towards music. Please feel free to give me any comments that you feel are appropriate, and if you can relate, then all's the better. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/84763 This is very much the first draft of this piece, and I'm not sure exactly where I'm going with it, so I'd like some serious feedback and a breakdown of what you think I can do to improve. I hope you enjoy it... NOTE: Title changed based upon popular comment. If you would be so kind when you comment as to let me know whether or not you think that this title better works with the piece, that would be great. (FYI, the original title was Director's Cut) http://www.eliteskills.com/z/49048 Mainly written as a way to express myself, but I like the way it turned out. Please tell me what you think and if you have any suggestions as to ways that it should be changed. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/49708 Another love poem of sorts. Although this one is not particularly happy. More along the lines of memories of better times. When you read it, please keep in mind that it starts in her memories, and then jumps forward in time to the present tense. Also, at the end she is seeing one thing, and everyone else is see just normality. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/50371 This was written after seeing my freshman English teacher's favorite poem, about dewdrops on a wheelbarrow (which, I might add, the entire class hated....Including me.) The sad thing is that I ended up trying to imitate it stylistically for its deeper meanings. So if you'd like, you can try to figure out some of my "deeper meanings," but if not, please at least tell me what you think. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/50999 I wrote this not all that long ago, and I really like the chorus (the bolded bits). Please tell me what you think. http://www.eliteskills.com/z/51212 Another set of song lyrics, although this one is about two years old. Once again, the bolded lines are the chorus. Any comments would be lovely. (And yes, I was depressed when I wrote this...)