| User | Gbaby36 |
| Topic | PLZ, Read My Poems! |
| Message | I have written over 45 poems. I’ve uploaded 36 so far. I would really appreciate it if you could take the time to read/comment some of them. They are mostly Dark/Death/Religious/Love/Depressed/Broken Heart/Broken/Dead Inside
Basically it could be considered Angst poetry. But with deeper meaning, symbolism, and feeling than your general Angst poetry. And the best part is when read in order it tells a little story! http://www.eliteskills.com/u/Gbaby36 Some samples include "Lightning flashes, from storms of venom Are burning out my retinas My vision skewed and blurred (I’m blind as stone) Now that I can no longer see Is there still dark? (Is there still someone?) I feel lost and alone!" "I feel so alone Lying in this casket of silence I am waiting for the girl Who will save me from this world Now as I think back to that time in December The way the stars shined I can only remember How Heaven called out my name But I turned my head away in shame" "I’ll lie here (Lie here) Right where you left me In this tragedy of silent memories Without ever finding a true love Lost and alone (Alone) Searching for someone to hold me as I cry These tears only fell when I was hiding from your face" "Wingless Angels seducing your conscience Clad in darkness like shadows of serenity Healing, wounding, calming, and consuming Sinful pleasures controlling your faith" "Is there any depth to this heart so cold and empty? It seems to never want to beat because of this disease That creeps up my spine and seeps into my heart Freezing my lungs so I can no longer breathe" http://www.eliteskills.com/u/Gbaby36 |
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| User | Gordon | 2007-01-11 | |
| Subject | Being alone |
| Message | Go to freewebs.com/lestdeals it is intresting and talks of being alone |
| User | Gordon | 2007-01-09 | |
| Subject | your Poems |
| Message | I do like your work because it comes from the sad heart inside. I think it is a strange world as when we fall in love they are in love with someone else and so on.
Every one says that we will get over it but I say we will lesrn to live with it. Whwn someone close dies the first time we enter another sad stage of life and laugh when in a crowed but die as soon as we are alone. In time we meet someone and forge a relationship, not perfect but well better than alone. The bright and good thing it seems to turn on the creative side which in your case is excllent and old gits like me can enjoy it. Please dont get happy too soon Gordon |