| User | johnroth |
| Topic | I really need feebac |
| Message | I posted some of my novel in progress on the site, but don’t really seem to be getting views or comments. But the formating is so ugly that I don’t think people really want to read what I have, and I’ve written a lot more since then. So, if anyone can do me a huge favor and tell me what they think of what I have so far, read what I have here:
http://samuraicat.250free.com/undeadrevisionforreviewers.doc And leave any comments you have here. |
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| User | SpartanSteve | 2007-02-11 | |
| Subject | I read some |
| Message | I read a good bit of it. At first it didn’t look like your link was working.
It makes me think of cartoons. Like sometime Tim Burton would do. The stylistics aren’t bad. The intro hurts my eyes a bit. I feel like it detracts from the story. You might consider undoing the double spacing, it makes the paragraphs seem huge and spread out. I read a good bit of it, and something about it doesn’t quite grab the reader. You could definitely do something with it, though. good luck with everything Steve |