| User | audiblescholar | | Topic | Tense switching. | | Message | I can’t decide whether my tense switches during this paragraph and whether it’s a problem or not. What do you think? Other critique is appreciated too.
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He remembered waking that morning in his apartment in Queens. His girlfriend, Allison, had spent the night. She was a morning person, and had managed to pull Charlie out of his bed at the far too early hour of nine am. His hungover brain (still fighting the aftereffects of drugs and alcohol from the night before) protested, so Allison prescribed a walk along the bay to clear his head. Charlie prescribed returning to bed. Allison won the argument, and they found themselves driving through the city towards the harbor.
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Thanks for your help. |
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| User | WhatYouWill | 2008-06-20 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | I don’t see any tense switching. |
| User | audiblescholar | 2008-02-13 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | Some context, by the way:
This is a sort of flashback within the larger story. The character Charlie is remembering the events of that morning. |
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