| User | mandyshay07 | | Topic | umm im confused | | Message | ok i wrote this once and idt it posted..go figure im still lost in this site.. but i dont get y everyone is so against writing in 1st person when writing a poem..wats so wrong with it? |
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| User | angela~ | 2004-07-08 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | I think it is better to stay away from it for one reason.....when people read the piece they have a harder time relating it to themselves and their lives. If you don’t use I, me, or my in the poem people can place themselves into the words instead of just seeing it as a personal poem about some unknown person. Do you see what I mean? There is always a place for first person writing but we must remember not to overuse it. |
| User | Webmaster | 2004-07-07 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | 1. I can definitely say that I think that personally I feel first person is a little redundant and isn’t used very skillfully and often is too redundant.
2. First person is a little redundant and isn’t...etc
http://www.eliteskills.com/dickinson1.php <-- emily dickinson using first person.
It’s really hard to write a teen angst poem in first person. Over half of teens that write poetry write something that sounds like..
You left me,
How could you ever do so,
shattered my soul
crimson blood on my wrists
cold blade,
I hate you,
Just cliche crap with dialogue directly talking to the person or people they have emotional conflict with addessing them as "you". Add some commas and and spacing and it’s supposedly turns into a poem rather than an angry letter. Lets rephrase the same words above without first person.
Empty streets with, <--- something is gone(What is gone? who took it?)
the light flickers and twitches, <-- Metaphor with illumination showing anger
from the broken light filled with new darkness, <-- It used to be great but now it sucks
Sparks fly in the inevitable tungsten wear <-- eventually the light will burn out completely
blah, well it’s a half-assed example, but you get the point. The definition of poetically is stating things with finesse. Stating things indirectly instead of spoon feeding your emotions or directly discribing the situation (e. g. "life sucks" and "i hate you")
If you let the reader use their wit and it takes them more than a skim through to understand your writing then it’s probably a good write.
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