| User | Clayton | | Topic | Site Up-date | | Message | I just read a comment " a great rhyme scheme does not make a poem great " or close to this!
So, I ask the class, What does?
Jimmy is your hand up? Stop picking your nose and dry off your ears and answer me!
FYI; Rhyme scheme is only a part!
Do not forget- meter, and that is not a parking meter
Do not forget- content, and I do not mean contented
Do not forget-pituresque- and I do not want a pixel
Do not forget-RYTHUM- that catchy little part that clicks as you read!
Do not forget- Punctuation- so that you do not run out of breath trying to capture a writers thought. However with most of the above missing, it is plain to see there was- little thought! |
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| User | Clayton | 2004-04-15 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | Very well done Jimmy, You may sit down.
Now if the rest of the class was listening, you may all do your homework. |
| User | Webmaster | 2004-04-15 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | Poetry is to elicit emotion and thought in the reader. If you spoon feed how you feel then there’s no interaction on the readers part other than "relating" and just about everyone has been through the breakups, friend fights, parent fights, losses, etc. I hate to see when people pick something about the poem to compliment(it’s still better than just saying "it was great" and leaving) and they choose rhyme.
Great rhyme. WHAT ABOUT THE CONTENT? How did the poem make you feel and what connections were made when in the reader. I think picking rhyme over great imagery, great concept, of wonderful use of ... to portray your theme is just an insult. "The rhyme of the poem is what I will choose to compliment on because that’s what stood out the most."
Make the readers use their intelligence and don’t directly spoon feed all the details.
Most of the time the rhyme is used incorrectly and dictates the content rather than the content dictate the rhyme. Let the lines not be predictable.
Crappy examples:
--- The average poem
(first person, picking an entity they have emotional conflict with(or just, "why does it have to be this way"). Usually family/friend/boyfriend/girlfriend relationship)
I feel my blood boiling hot, (cliche) (first person)
of my soul set out to rot, (picks common theme with little elaboration)
Why must it always be this way? (rhetorical question with cliche)
Cold blade against my wrists today? (suicide cliche, pity value)
Why does life treat me unfair? (another rhetorical question cliche)
Leading purely to despair. (predictable by rhyme, cliche)
The guilt, the guilt, it pains me so, (forced by rhyme, cliche)
of which you will never know. (you will never understand me Uber-Cliche)
Why did you leave me on the day, (cliche theme, directly stated)
When I needed you most, eh? (forced rhyme, cliche)
Oh, silly thou, life is like a dream, (horribly overused metaphor, be original)
what will become of you. (cliche)
Check out the classics and work to make your writing stand out! Giving good time, elaboration, and detail to the works of others will definitely help you improve. If the point has already been made don’t reword, might as well say, "I agree" and leave. Put time into the thought as you would like others to do for you. |
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