| User | dj_pate86 | | Topic | Please read poem.. | | Message | this is a poem I wrote in a very deep point in my life.. and i found that it saved me from alot of pain... I hope you like it.. and I wouldnt mind hearing feedback.
How much.. (title)
In life we ask are selves how much we can take,
How much pain, suffering, and sorrow can we endure?
We can endure as much as we can put upon our selves,
Life is not something that was meant to be lived to the fullest,
Life is meant to be lived to your own potential.
Life has challenges, life has obstacles, has windy roads and the roads
That was the wrong path. But to are selves is are own destiny, we are
The ones that posses the power of are actions. In the end everyone dies
From something they cannot control, nor can we control how we live.
There are boundaries and borders to everything we do, no matter how hard We try we cannot escape them. In conclusion are destiny is to our
Own, we are born to die, but when we live are lives, the control
We have, is something we say to our selves, we are too afraid
To express our option to this world for the fear of it not being accepted.
Live by what makes you happy,
Live with what makes you free; don’t forget the voices in your head,
Don’t forget the voices from your heart… In life it’s all we have...
Don’t let go of your happiness. Don’t be afraid to express your self.
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| User | | 2006-01-15 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | i’d have to agree with more prose as well, but its still good
i want to know why the poem is here and not on the elite works? so that everyone could see it, and not have to root through forums to get to it... |
| User | abuzzbuzz92 | 2005-12-17 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | The main point of the poem is very good but i think i will have to agree with clovernfoxglove as it does resemble a prose more than a poem
Keep writing anyway |
| User | clovernfoxglove | 2005-12-14 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | I agree. This is more like a prose, but remember poetry doesn’t have rules, so I guess anything goes. It all depends on the writer. |
| User | Aruemos | 2005-12-11 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | I don’t know if i would call it a poem, it is more prose to me. A collection of statements, wisdoms and words to live by. I could see where it is helpful. It is a wonderful assortment of ideas and facts pointing to one end. Thanks for posting:)
I could see it a poem though. Post it if i get to it Ill try to comment. |
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