| User | FailureXX | | Topic | anyone? | | Message | A small step, To her.
I am trying my hardest to Leave my sins behind.
I want to ask you, save me from this misery.
Ive never bared any murder of this kind.
I’ve never been a witness to a love gone so raw.
Have you the slightest clue, of the burden you have caused me?
My heart as gone eskew, as I beg you not to watch.
A small step Below her
I am Dazing on The spot, left to think upon the subject.
I make a plan to say goodbye,
as im yelling at my shadow, This cannot be me.
Looking down upon myself, i no longer wish to be her.
Cant you see that I am bigger, I am better
than that girl.
A small step, Below her.
You scare me to a bitter heart,
Left simply to a blurr.
I am done with this memory,
this precious ache ive known for way too long.
Dont haunt me anymore, as youve done
most of my life, I made too many mistakes,
Im sorry that you pay for this.
Im sorry that you’re Living in her shadow.
A small step below her.
anyone have any constructive criticism? |
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| User | bbcherry | 2006-07-30 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | good poem but you’d get more comments if you took rokhal’s advice. |
| User | Rokhal | 2006-07-27 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | Wrong section! Put it in writing or creative writing, or submit it. |
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