| User | Childoutspoken |
| Topic | Would you Read it? |
| Message | Sorry people... I had to... I need help... because well I want to see how much interest there would be in this story line I’m developing. I won’t give specific details... or at least too much... more or less to protect my s/l so forgive me if this isn’t enough...
This is basically the synopsis of this book: "In a land where there is relative chaos, one of the main deities, OniKina, has disappeared. No one knows whether she is dead or alive nor can they find a way to figure it out, for the Oni are notorious for refusing to show up when they are most needed. Erihany, a Priestess at OniKina’s temple, is left in charge while the High Priestess goes to retrieve a promising student from the north, her niece, Lauryanna Kivendri (Daughter of Kael and Taylz). When Asteria arrives at her sister’s home she asks after her own daughter, Lyra, to discover she too is missing and that Ivy, the Protectress of the Southern Realm and all its inhabitants, has gone to try and find her. Its then that Asteria has cause to wonder if the disappearances of Lyra and OniKina are connected for the two shared some... background." Its basically a story told from many different standpoints.... Such as Lauryanna, Kiryl (Lyra’s youngest son), Erihany, Ivy, and a few others :) So basically what I’m asking is... if you read that on the back of a book... would you purchase that book and read it? -Alli |
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| User | Charlenee | 2005-09-28 | |
| Subject | untitled |
| Message | Well it seems interesting but i agree with joeyalphabet, it is a bit confusing. Your giving up way too much information, you want the synopsis to pull the reader the first time, this synopsis a reader would have to read like 3 times to get it and that’s not good. I’m sure it’s going to become a good book though. I like books that are told from many different standpoints and in the end are bound together. I hope i helped, good luck.
-Charlenee |
| User | joeyalphabet | 2005-09-28 | |
| Subject | untitled |
| Message | Not really. It’s not my kind of thing though. The synopsis sounds a bit confusing. If you want some advice, the blurb on the back of a book is a tease to get the reader to buy it. Try a rewrite that gives less detail and more intrigue, like who’s behind the disappearances or does this mean some major upheaval looms.
I don’t think many POVs is a good idea, BTW. Either tell the story 3rd person or 1st person from one character’s POV. |