| User | lenny | | Topic | October | | Message | October’s chill wind
numbs the heart, ripples
browned grass between cold
carved stones of loss.
The oldest cliche’ -
rest in peace -
falls froms priestly lips
to fade with daddy
on cruel, biting gusts
of ushering finality.
Tears, as life, evaporate,
leave only stained cheeks
and memories of warmer days.
lenny |
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| User | Logic | 2006-07-06 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | This poem makes no sense at all. Are you new? |
| User | Aruemos | 2005-12-14 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | If you have something you really want comments on, go ahead and post it here. Youll probably have better luck with the elite posts section though |
| User | Aruemos | 2005-12-14 | | | Subject | untitled | | Message | If its you first piece, yea this place is fine, for all others go to your page go to the upper right corner find the column .:members:. look for the hyperlink submit. |
| User | clovernfoxglove | 2005-12-14 | | | Subject | Very good | | Message | Wow, I’m really impressed with the emotions you put in this piece. The setting really does mimic the feeling I get from October. Your use of imagery is good enough to put the reader in the poem. Two thumbs up. I’d love to see more |
| User | lenny | 2005-10-09 | | | Subject | Question | | Message | Can somebody please tell me if this is posted in the correct forum. I am new here today and still a bit bewildered by the site map. Thank you. lenny |
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