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Posted by: Aruemos
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Creator Notes
I like this poem not for just the fact it is one of a few of the entries that actual involves thread, but that it goes back to the source of the thread. It points out love(I don't believe it to be lust in this one) as the culprit in this persons life, and how though their capiblity(or overablity) to love has put them in situtations dangerous to one's phyic and self. I really do like this piece and all the others entered...except peace...there was no text in that one... Oh, well!! Life is a Problem wins!!
Life Is a Problem
You may say my life is a problem
But I’ll say it’s a ball of yarn
And though it is much unrolled and unraveled,
It hasn’t ripped and it hasn’t torn.
You may say I am a lover’s curse
But I’ll say I am a lover’s string
And though I’m close to touching ground,
My love to love keeps dangling.
Sure,you may say I am fortune’s fool
But honestly I am fortune's thread,
Inching to an end perhaps,
But nonetheless I still aint dead.
Now you may wonder how it came to be
That my life should hang by such a feeble net,
But I’m still breathing and I’m still living
So I wont be solving that problem yet.
Self Critique
Abstract
Life hangs on the end of a thin string.
Details
Identify a character fault of you own. Then compare that fault to a life holding string/thread/fabric. Finally, describe how that string can be or has been severed.
Conditions
Must have at least three stanzas of lentgh longer than two lines.
Prize
I will read and comment on ten of your pieces and then attempt to write a poem about you.
Entries
Peace
............................
she is not the best
never the best, always th...
To My Beloved Friend
In his childhood he was h...
a puppet on your string
all the stories i've...
Strangling Lust
Lust threatens to take ov...
Life Is a Problem
You may say my li...
The Thinker
Look at that hill covered...
Porcelain Doll
You sit upon your mantelp...
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