i tried to comment on Bokeh but it wont let me. i just wanted to say that its FIERCE! truly! that is an amazingly powerful piece and it really moves a person to think. ive pretty much seen things like that my whole life. im from brooklyn ny and there are Many that blur into the malaise of self-centeredness.
Thanks, Angelo, for your thoughts on "Shiver". I meant "faith". I can see why you might think it should be "fate", but I'm not so arrogant as to claim to know the fate of the the dead.
I was merely thinking of how the dead are dressed up and painted to make them look alive and attractive. Luster dust is a type of decorating powder used in cake and candy decorating to add color and sparkle to desserts. Somehow, for me this tied in with what the dead (or the dying) are "feeding" us. These images. They have faith that others will feel comforted by their decorated bodies, I guess. They don't see it as some sort of dreadful, sad lie. Is it because they are so afraid of the "truth" of death (whatever that "truth" might be for them)? Or because they wish to maintain some control even after they are "gone"? Or do they think that it is important that their bodies be beautified for some spiritual reason? I don't know. I suppose it varies from person to person. Somehow, vanity seems tied up in all of it, though.
Anyhow, I agree that the beginning is the strongest part of that piece. I'm sure I will continue to tinker with it.
Thanks for your thoughts and input. Of course I take it personally. All poets do, I think. These are our creations. I would be concerned if people didn't feel that. But that is exactly why, for me, there would never be hard feelings. I want to grow and to improve. I want to connect with others. That's the point of all this for me. So again, thank you. I appreciate your honest feedback, as it helps me to further my goal. I also just enjoy seeing people's reactions.