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Exhaustion
Mood: Juggling TasksIt is nearly time to go to work. Work I love, but exhaustion I am not as fond of. Exhaustion is something that sleep cannot cure, that eating right cannot remedy, and that drags on your mind, making it useless. It stiffles laughter, comfort, calmness, and creativity-- a culmination of the leftover sludge of being busy, of being wrung dry and tossed to an anxious world every day. Nope. I got seven hours in last night, and my exhaustion isn't going anywhere.
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| Hi AnneBoleyn,
I appreciate your kind words in regard to my poem, "For My Father". Look forward to reading some of your stuff as well. Annie |
| | Posted on 2012-10-10 21:20:51 | by annie0888 - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| I just spend some time reviewing your work. I hope you don't mind. This is something I do when I see promise in a writers poems. After reading most of your stuff I can tell you that I really enjoyed it, especially the language used. The only advice I could give is to work on the format more, the overall appearance of the text as well as the sequence of ideas presented. That's the only thing I see that can be improved but you're already on your way of doing that...
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| | Posted on 2012-10-10 14:27:58 | by Paradox - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Thank you for your comment on Ashes! It was something that occured to me on my way to school; and maybe expanding it might be a good idea! Now I am off to check some of your work!
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| | Posted on 2012-10-10 07:51:48 | by expiring_touch - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| I love your poem. I want to know, is the speaker of "His and her context" a model? Ahhh, you have NO idea how much I love it, I love it a lot.
-Steph |
| | Posted on 2012-04-13 22:11:16 | by EmpathicAya - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Dear Anne, Thank you so much for your comments, it really hit me because I am such an amateur.
Thanks a mill Wonderwords |
| | Posted on 2012-02-28 13:54:37 | by Wonderwords - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Thank you for your thorough analysis and comments on 'The Rape of Persephone' I appreciate the compliments. The rhyme scheme was pretty difficult, trying not to sound too repetitive and redundant. I've never really written a lengthy poem until this one and my other piece 'The Siren's Call' and so I'm glad I've done it successfully.
As far as your questions, I'll tackle first "Does any part of the character represent you?" - Yes, even though it is based off of Persephone from Greek mythology, I don't like my poems to be one sided. I always try to hold a deeper meaning in them. In this case part of myself was Persephone and in some of the details she's been through being both literal in her case, and metaphorical in mine. As far as the question pertaining to chastity being seen as good in this day and age and whether it's relevant, I would have to say that though in modern times it wouldn't mean that a good person is necessarily chaste...but from my background, being a religious person, I do hold those two together. At least for myself. And being that the character is in part myself I chose to bring up those values that were also prominent in the settings era. I can see how the character feels generic, and I will definitely try to work on that, maybe I didn't give enough background to her character and why she was so alluring to Hades...but at the same time I guess knowing both characters backgrounds I felt that I didn't need to elaborate on them. Something o work on for sure. So again, thank you. I like when people offer constructive criticism, helps with the growing process :) EJ |
| | Posted on 2012-02-20 17:45:31 | by Realitywarp87 - [ Reply to This ] - |
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