Hi and thanks for your comments. This poem is still a work in progress and though I want to shift gears toward the end...I am still not satisfied. I will consider your comments as I rework. In the mean time thank you for taking time to read.
cowboy, i just got to read your put down of one of my compositions from 2007 titled, "war Prayeries".you certainly have a right to your opinions, and to express them however errant and/or misconceived though they are.i still admire you for at least commenting after giving it what little time or respect that you could.i'm only trying to be as novel as i can and to push the envelope as they say, by making more of some words or terms so to give them a new life and future that they might not other wise have, but not for i.please do check out the last recent five after being absent for nearly 3 years, or if you don't, won't, or can't, your explainations or excuses are also welcome.until we are by fate brought together again, so long cowboy.Regis Rex Deutsche Konig, Karlz