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    Your poetry is too...long. Try to pull your readers in before placing all of your attention on a mere story. Spending too much time thinking about what to write and rough drafts remove any interest or creativity that would have been possible. Keep trying.
    | Posted on 2008-05-27 19:09:17 | by Logic - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks for reading the keeper of my heart....I know I use a few cliché's in there but it seems that there are times when "Love" really is a big cliché's and I knew no other way to put it.........lol
    | Posted on 2007-12-23 23:42:45 | by aNNmARIE - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks for the comment! I read your work and I think it's amazing! I've added you to my stalk list <3

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    britt
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 12:26:58 | by CaughtRedhanded - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    I appreciate your input.

    The second half was sorta added on a whim, and wasn't meant to flow or fit with the first part. I just wanted to write it out as one sentence, but then decided to break it up.
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 20:16:38 | by Inkybro - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks so much for a comment :) I agree with you about adding more to the last section, but I also agree that it would ruin the last statement. I sat there for about an hour wracking my brain for a way to make it longer but I always went back to that statement.
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