--Elite Writer Alias: Astarael Name: Danielle ! ASL: 19/Girl/Baltimore Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Education ] Days Away: 3254 Life Story: Surreal [ Ignore User ]
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Thanks for the comment on 'Danielle' Funny how that's your name. I certainly appreciate all the criticism. I'm looking to possibly write another version in the future since this is the last strong emotion that I feel I can still write about. Should I do another version, I will definitely keep your comments in mind, esp about the little quirks and comparing my relationship to the relationship of the past. I'm still in the process of finding out what those quirks are so I'm not quite ready to write about them but thanks for the idea. Hope to read more of your stuff in the future.
you know sometimes I don't think to much about my method... you comments were great because the made me aware of things that might be missing.
little girls don't. and I think the point of that statement is just to rub some salt on the indignity of it/the situation.
I'll have to work on clarity
because I meant that a father who thinks of his family beyond killing the dog is a man who does the right thing but has to let real justice slip between his fingers.
with the sun dial thing I felt it would have been easy to say that good looks away and I didn't want it to be easy, all the time people say God has a purpose etc, so I wanted to throw that in as purpose.
Also the last section is meant to portray the ones who prey on the good nature of little ones by saying they have lost their dog and asking the little girls and or boys to help look for them.
Anyway you're thoughts were most valuable and I appreciate your time.