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Thanks for reading 'Airports' and thanks even more for commenting on it. I have fixed the silly little mistakes, getting my to's and too's back to front. I can't believe I made such mistakes, I assure you English is my first language, but that doesn't mean it's first class.
Thanks for the critique of the last lines. You're right about their origin, the emotion in them is real and is really what the poem is all about. But instead of clearing the or structuring it, I instead just jumped to the punchline. I often bore myself with my own ridiculous indulgence!
Best wishes,
Rob
PS: sorry it's taken a while to thank you for your comment, I haven't logged on in for a few months.
ahhh Sophie! I can't comment on your poems because you've been away for more than 5 days! hurry up and come back, I want to tell you what I think about "Quiet she was"
Hi, thank you for your comments on "fret not" I will think about rewording so it makes more sense. But I don't think ill change to much thou, I just played around with meter and iamb, messing around with 4 to 3 count.
Regards
Johan
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