--Elite Writer Alias: Cannablisjunkie Name: Pablo De-Jesus Quintana ASL: 22/Male/Indianapolis, IN Website:[ Website ] Days Away: 2965 Life Story: (Still In Progress) [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 1 Forum Posts: 2 Shoutbox Posts: 1 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 5584 D 15.3 Years 1.53 Decades 186.13 Months 797.71 Weeks 5.584000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: Society is a fraud so complete and venal that it demands to be destroyed beyond the power of memory to recall its existence.
She's a cheese ball, always
cheesin' with tears like waterfalls
from eyes bleedin.' (clear liquids!)
But, she's not sad yet happy!
To be loungin' around in my company.
It's relaxing, being there on the ground spinning
arms wrapped around sides laughing
At each others cries!
..Is exciting just to be able to see
the way in which the world cannot be.. all lies.
To have been side by side coinciding
minds alike in improvising the ways
we'll blink, speak, and think we ought to be doing so..
At the peak like springs young bright glow
birds and owls in hollow holes
will 'whoo' and sing as night comes and goes..
Reminding me of mornings i'd wake up next to you
still asleep, like before I went to bed just as beauitful.
Cheese ball!?!??!?! BBQ?!?!!?? COOKIE?!?!? yeah i thought soo.....
Look at my poem mathematics if you want to know how I feel about shape in general. Or look at my poem Dirty Portrait which features a shape that is similar to your poem yet, I think, it's a bit easier on the eyes. Long lines aren't that long and shorter ones that short. In that one I didn't care about shape at all and I clearly expressed that in the beginning. What I meant to say in my first reply is that some subject matter lends itself to the style you used but some doesn't, it's all a matter of shape complimenting content.