Thanks for the hearty comments on the poem. I do like your journal.
I kind of think of the presentation of my work as problematic. Like trying to draw a line around space to say this is where it ends. or perhaps when you look at space and parts of solar systems look clouded, that's where you never wrote to, or couldn't write to, then, maybe they are perfected clouded. In any case I'm not sure how I would ever present it. I'm pretty sure I never will. In time the things that you cared so much to write about become the things you cared too much to write about and then the things you can no longer care about. I am not sure how that happens. It's not an apple you can break open.
Are you pregnant? Did i ask you that already?
If so I am excited for you :)
Hey Chelebel. Had an internet startup shocker with a new company that knocked me off the grid for a few weeks. It was good actually, i've missed music.
The thing with that poem and it being paired with the song.... well for me that do do do do do do part takes you right to that good place, that good place being so apparent, accessible, easily able to be drawn upon. Then, it's a question of why would you walk away from that?
That's the apple i guess, what i'm asking her, why would you walk away from that. the bitter sweetness. that's what most of my poems are about. And like all of my poems it could use work, especially the middle section... but I'm not really so self conscious anymore that i have to wait till i've got something perfect. putting it down is part of the process. Anyway, I thank you for your workshop minded critique, your offering of awesomeness (which should be the spirit of this place) which i will read again and again no doubt.