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    Name: Ben Sacks
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    Journal: Helloha
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    Mood: The Usual
      
    Hi all,

    I've been away for a bit, but will try and re-engage in the next few days. After I get my wisdom teeth out this afternoon...


    ...Created 2009-11-24 17:30:50     [ View Past Journals ]

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    If there's one thing I've learned by giving and receiving critique and commentary on poetry it's that there really isn't any definable meaning to anything. People come from so many different places and that influences what they read, turning the denotation of words (and perhaps the original intent and tone of the writer) into the connotation that best fits their lives at the time. I try to stay as objective as I can though, thinking about what the writer wants to say to people, and when it comes to constructive criticism... I want people to improve as writers, note their flaws, and chalk their shortcomings up to inexperience, not absorb other people's ideas of self-fulfilling grandeur. Writing is both a skill and a talent, but it takes a humble man to tell his own story correctly, honestly; and a good writer to explain it with captivation, vision, and art.

    So no matter how we perceive what people write, I think some of the things I've mentioned are generally unwavering, have room for improvement, and require practice. That's what I like to critique about the most because content is the most subjective thing about writing in my opinion.
    | Posted on 2011-05-31 07:47:00 | by Dolor - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thankyou very much for your comment on my poem "weak"....i will give you the reasoning behind the puncuation....i've never been too keen on it...most times i don't use any at all but i've had many say it was difficult to read with none...so i tried my best to put them where i thought they belonged...i'm not smart in that area of writing...and i believe that in my opinion in poetry you do not nessairly need to have it....but that's just me because i've never really used it....i am not one of those people who goes to school and classes for writing i write only because i love to...not because i want to be better or more unique than anyone else...i simply write because it feel right... anyways thankyou and i understand...maybe you have some suggestion on the puncuation i could certaintly learn more lol
    ~kc
    | Posted on 2011-03-22 07:30:57 | by taintedsmiles - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    mooooop
    | Posted on 2009-11-18 23:14:15 | by trinityfinger - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thankyou Ben! I would be very happy to see your presence in some thoughts on my works here, my oldest pieces i wrote are without "" and the newer ones are with "". Hope you are doing well and that you are fighting fit!

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-09-29 09:39:10 | by Clayman - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    y'welcome
    | Posted on 2009-09-29 05:16:55 | by meoww - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    (Before I begin, I would like to apologise for the state and length of this message. It has been approximately 22 hours since I have slept, and three since my brain has actually been using words to communicate. I've been thinking in numbers since I started my first math assignment of the year three hours ago, as stated above, and it's effected me enough that I just tried to factor a talk I had with my mother. See my journal entry on factoring conversation.)

    Ben:

    It's nice to hear back from people whose poems I comment on. I really enjoyed your poem and you will probably see more of my comments after I finish reading a really annoying book for a really annoying reason. . Interestingly enough (not really), just previous to reading your math-related message (duh, I guess, since your poem's main theme was math. Besides that whole love thing. Whatever.)I had spent a good three hours cramming, into a brain that will probably never be able to write poetry again, mostly useless mathematical concepts. That last sentence was constructed badly, but I don't have the energy to go back and be poetic. Or make any sense at all. As stated above. That is, the poetic part. Crap.

    Yours,
    Jane

    (Actually i grew up in, not live in, Gallawump. And, furthermore, Gallawump is mostly a concept than a place.)

    ^ ^ I just realized the above statement sounded like I was correcting you. In a scolding way. Or not. Either way, I wasn't. Scolding, that is. Or correcting, I guess. Just expanding.

    I'll stop rambling.

    And now I see/realize/remember that I already added my closing, and all this is extraneous.

    Shutting up now.
    | Posted on 2009-08-26 22:41:26 | by WhatYouWill - [ Reply to This ] -



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