--Elite Writer Alias: Elleisbroken Name: Axelle Black ASL: 17/Female/Michigan Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 15 Life Story: Psychopathic. [ Ignore User ]
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Journal: Advice for all -------------------------------------------
Mood: Straightening things out...
Alright so I have been going through so many poems that past few days. So I just want to set out some advice for everyone. As I read through the poems they all seems to become more and more alike. All about someone that hurt them. All poetry does not have to be depressed, write about something your passionate about. Hell, write about your cat! Just what you need to do to make that poem more engaging and not seem like a depressed high schooler wrote the poem or if the poem is about a pet. Use tone and imagery. The tone will set a mood and give the poem or piece the feeling you want to be felt. Imagery is what is to be used to give the things that you want your reader to see. Don't use everyday words, take a chance. Go look up simple words in a thesaurus and use a different one. It will make your work seem much more sophisticated and engaging. So that's all I have right now.
i thank you for your comment on "As I Go" but at the same time, though you have a very valid point, at the time i wrote it, i was a 12 year old fool comming of his adhd pills. nastalgic eh? i dont intend on trying to fix it, but if you would like more in depth, and non depressed adolescence work, i would advise taking a peek at my poem "Us and The Music".
Oh, dont get me wrong, I fully support random Hello's (I'm the kid who waves hi to strangers on the street just to meet and greet their judging stares through slanted eyes).
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