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    Name: Aya Azura
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    Journal: Hey
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    Mood: The Usual
      
    Hey, lookin' at you
    (I wanna take ya, wanna take ya, wanna take ya)
    Wanna take ya to the back of the room...


    ...Created 2012-03-29 23:32:59     [ View Past Journals ]

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    Thank you, I guess that is what I'd like my book to be like. Rather than a typical book, more a series of posters you unroll and need a magnifying glass to look at, feelings all over the place. I appreciate the favorite.
    | Posted on 2012-04-14 12:04:42 | by Daniel Barlow - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hey Aya!

    thank you!
    didn't know I would actually be visible since I'm new here. Glad you dropped by and sent me a warm welcome here in ES.

    don't hesitate to say what's on your mind about my writings :)

    Regards,
    Lee
    | Posted on 2012-04-07 23:16:41 | by LadyLee - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Haha, cheater! Though that would be a pretty good month theme too, editing old poetry. Still, you should do it because I don't want to be the only NaPo-er on this site. So looonely.
    | Posted on 2012-04-06 08:39:05 | by saartha - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Belated thanks for the favorite and the stalk! And yes, Mikolowski's poem is just unggggg.
    | Posted on 2012-03-30 16:23:59 | by saartha - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thank you for the favorites addition! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem so much. :)
    | Posted on 2012-03-14 01:14:25 | by Santi - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thank you very much for your comments on "Whispering to the Wind".

    The lines you mentioned are my favorites as well.

    And you are right in treating each line as its own little piece. There are a few lines that are to be used in conjunction...but that's really up to the reader to decide, isn't it?

    I believe you are right...it is a vigil.

    Again, thank you for your comments!

    Take care,

    K

    I love the lines
    "Hope becomes overwhelmed
    With promises to keep."

    I feel like each stanza is a little blip of consciousness, rather than it being one flowing poem. If it wasn't meant that where, there seems to be something stunting the transition from stanza to stanza.

    It might be the lack of punctuation, which makes it so that I read it it where I want the punctuation to be, or where I assume they will be, and it messes up whatever flow you intended for the poem to have. Each stanza and each line is powerful within itself, but they have a hard time connecting together to form one poem, which makes it seem as if the poem is lacking one clear idea. But based on your description, that's probably what you wanted, more to capture fleeting feelings than a full idea, and if that was your goal, than you succeeded. You have a lot of gem statements here in this piece, and my favorite is of course the one I pointed out. I feel like sort of like it was one of those things where you see many people walking around with candles in honor of someone. I think it's called a Vigil.

    | Posted on 2012-03-12 15:28:03 | by krs3332003 - [ Reply to This ] -



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