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    For me the line, "Rain and tears" was first thought of as a commentary on the value of emotion and intention. Both refer to falling droplets of water. However, the emotion that exits behind tears without a doubt changes it to something deeper.When a person cries, there eyes haven't just built up water which need to be released due to the pull of gravity (as is for clouds). In this sense, it is relatable to the old wink vs blink debate.

    However, that message doesn't really fit with rest of the poem in my eyes. For me the poem refers to someone who, because they are unable to deal with the uncertainties in life looks to God to provide a foundation and hope. Those uncertainties are expressed in "On this day I wonder what my life is about.", and "Running somewhere, yet i don't know where, where is.". Definitely two thoughts which still haunt me as I lay in bed at night (for me these are thoughts made in reflection at the end of day rather than the start of a new dawn). I could only assume that it was meant to illicit feelings of sadness and pathos, as you invoke imagery that is often thought of as sad. But that the line had no other real reason to exist, and could be easily removed without harming the integrity of the poem.

    However, I didn't really want the line to be just this call to my emotions. I always felt rain was given a bad rep in Western culture, we see it as gloomy in sad, instead of seeing it as a sort of breast milk for the forests. We live for its waters, yet recoil as it disturbs our manicured hair. So I looked for a different meaning, one which I sorta knew would be wrong but was happy to see nonetheless.

    Sandwiched between these uncertainties is a vague fact. Something you can almost grasp, but isn't really clear. In a way its similar to God. This sort of line gives meaning to the tears, in the same way God gives meaning to a person. You don't express why the tears are different, or in what way. But the line resonates inside of me. God doesn't explain your purpose or meaning, what gives your life value, but his presence resonates that there is purpose and meaning. And i don't know for sure that rain is different from tears, just as I don't know for sure god is real. But it is the idea which comforts and compels me to believe it.

    So in your little poem I saw a glimpse of God. Which is something I hope you can take pride in. Of course perhaps now I'm just being silly. I just watched Great Gatsby so the grander images, and deeper meanings run rampant in my mind. And I've never been good at really understanding the meaning of a poem :P
    | Posted on 2013-05-29 08:36:21 | by Erreur - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hey there, I really liked your poem Tomorrows (but for some reason can't comment on the poem itself so this'll have to do).

    I've never been able to have such faith in salvation. However, I've always found myself envious of those who do. You very succinctly expressed the power of such faith.

    What did you intend the line "Rain and tears so alike, yet not" too mean? I've got an idea but I'd like to hear your side of it.
    | Posted on 2013-05-28 10:53:08 | by Erreur - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    i'm glad you liked my magdalene poem. i am also working on a short story about her, using a bit of my own insights on who she might have been and inspired by some of the things i have found in my research
    | Posted on 2013-02-22 14:34:27 | by gwenn sundala - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thank you for your comments on my poems. i hope you enjoy reading them as much as i enjoyed writing them. looking at your work, i believe you have great potential. keep at it, young one. your future awaits you.
    | Posted on 2013-02-19 12:46:36 | by gwenn sundala - [ Reply to This ] -



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