--Elite Writer Alias: Ethan Brody Name: Ethan Brody ASL: 35 - M - Chile Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Education ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 120 Life Story: Getting experience [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 11 Forum Posts: 20 Shoutbox Posts: 1 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 5024 D 13.76 Years 1.38 Decades 167.47 Months 717.71 Weeks 5.024000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: To-morrow, and to-morrow, and to-morrow, creeps in this petty pace from day to day, to the last syllable of recorded time; and all our yesterdays have lighted fools the way to dusty death. Out, ....
Thanks for your insightful comments. Always good to hear from someone with an open mind and the will to use it.
It was an incomplete work that I posted, and I have changed it a bit, though still not totally satisfied.
Thank you again for taking the time to read it and reply.
Thank you for your thoughtful comment on Real Life-I don't often write free verse so I'm glad someone liked it. I will look at the first stanzas and see if they can't be tweaked a bit. It wasn't about a particular bad thing that happened to me, more of just how I was feeling at the moment.
That was perhaps the most connected and thorough comment i have ever recieved. you're right about everything as i can tell now. I write poetry in a spell where i can't help but to write it, it helps knowing things can be gathered. I hope you found some resolve and that perhaps that some resolve was something triggered. I feel as if the sonnet would go better as A song of Sonnets, with verse sections of 10x12 (as Sonnets) with lines 11x2 times however many in the set to end with. it was quite simply unfinished. I needed a new form to develop. I thank you for the comment greatly. I only wish i could favorite it.
Thank you for commenting on my write Permission given, permission granted. I really appreciate you feedback and anticipate reading some of your writings. I am trying to comment more and and long to become a good writer. I really enjoy this site and have stayed away for periods of time, but Elite Skills is still one of my favorite haunts. It's nice to know that this site precedes the Facebook era. :) I do agree with you that I should have labeled the write as prose. Also, I found the few lines of your friend's poem about the dodo bird quite intriguing, I'm flattered that something of mine would remind you of someone else's poem. I believe that when a poem, story, art work, or anything of an outlet can trigger an emotion or memory is a good trigger to the emotions, not that I am trying to give my write any type of prestige. :) But, I am grateful that it touched you a tad, nevertheless. Have a great year. pioneerheart