--Elite Writer Alias: Exodus Night Sky Name: Tatiana Gomez ASL: Female/CT Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Education ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 243 Life Story: [ Ignore User ]
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Thank you for your comment on 'Ghost's Heart', I believe that was the title. I have a bad memory sometimes. Haha. Oh boy, but thanks anyway. I enjoy when people take the time to read other my things.
maybe you should think about rewriting the piece encorporating more of the ideas you explained to me.
they make sense.
i have a friend who gets so hideously depressed on sundays... for him theyre like a duel... this town aint big enough for the both of us... and right now... well... he gets injured every week [injured in a knocked down in mood kinda way] though thankfully they havent finished him off...
so get more explicit in your images because even though they make sense when you explained them they meant absolutely nothing on their own... flesh each line out... find an image to weigh it down with so that it will find some point of recognition with the reader...
Thank you for the comment on the poem, it was pretty constructive... I am not sure on how to make it more poetic tho... What was wrong with it? Rhyming, Flow? Storybase??
Hey thanks for commenting my poem Who are we? I made that one and ended it quickly cause I wasnt even sure if people would like or get it. So I was kind of taking it for a test drive. :) If it works out at all im going to add to it and fix it. So thanks for the comment.
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