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I normally don't try and tell writers what to write but since you asked for my opinion, I would say I liked the 1st one best. I like it for its simplicity and I think it fits most with the ideas/message you were trying to convey.
I like it. Your idea that is. Feel free to comment on any of my stuff as well. I have one, a 3 part sonnet that I have not yet posted but it has elements of your broken wing poem.
Many of your poems I have related to and loved, so please take no offense that I didn't particularly like one. A few that I have liked, but I have not read all so I'm just giving examples are:
Words Shall Speak
Its Time For Me To Live
and many more. The one I commented on was a good poem, but it just did not move me or stick with me as some have. But nice job anyway. You're a really good writer.
My reply to your river song was just a thought I had after the read. The addition of my lines to your work is perfectly ok with me. That was not my original intention. I just got carried away with the way you stated the work. I always like to read you. Your works are so mind bending .
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