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Thanks for your comment on my Piece Mothers Hands. Yes in fact the commas are where I had decidedly wanted them. I do recognize that they are oddly placed and my plague the reader as to why they are where they are; but this reason is partly why I placed them. I hoped in some sense the reader would pause and think about how, if it were someone speaking to them the sentences would be strung together. As well, taking hint from the first reason I placed the comma's to hint at strain. When writing of something on such an emotional level, much the same as speaking, it's hard to speak fluidly. Think of it this way, when somebody dies in a family and a funeral is held speeches are often given about that person. Though the speeches are well thought out emotion pauses the words and in a way gives them more depth.
Anyways I hope this sheds some light and answers your question.