--Elite Writer Alias: JAvery Name: Jennifer Avery ASL: 30/F/Calhoun, GA Website:[ Website ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 3401 Life Story: Inarticulate doctors [ Ignore User ]
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I made some revisions on To Kiss a Dead Man... They're better than the original, but I don't think the story's all it could be yet. If you get a free minute, I was hoping you could maybe look it over and give me some more advice, especially on the revisions you suggested.
Thanks for the advice on To Kiss A Dead Man. I wrote it a while back and I was really proud of it, but now that I'm a little older I'm trying to find ways to make it better. Your critisism is much appreciated, and I will deffinitly start making some revisions.
Thanks for the nice compliment on Seasonal Lover's Dance - I lived in GA for about 3 years and never saw snow either but some wonderful lightning! I love weather in all of "IT's " glories in all places!
thanks for the comment and for making the poem a fave - it really is much appreciated! and yeah, i would have twisted those movie lines more but i thought quoting them pretty directly would be a sure way to avoid completely mangling them and ruining their charm.