--Elite Writer Alias: Jakirina Name: Alina Soto ASL: 19/F/WI Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 2474 Life Story: Like a Insane Movie. [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 18 Forum Posts: 6 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 4817 D 13.2 Years 1.32 Decades 160.57 Months 688.14 Weeks 4.817000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: "Dare to love completely."
Thanks so much for your feedback! It really helped... i did mean to do the stanza's like that that... nice someone noticed... I'll go back and check my spelling I was in a rush putting this poem up... I'd love to read some of your poems but you have so many where do you think I should start?
hey,,,,thanks for your comment....and your tips on how to create better pause effects, even though I know it does not need teh "..." , i am just so used to writing in that way since I mainly wrote song lyrics before, and that helped me to know the way i would express it with vocals better.
thanks for the comment on my scrawl. i'm not much of a suicide poet, i think living is harsh enough for poems. death always makes people roll their eyes in an "oh whatever" sort of fashion. everyone dies, thats boring. and to do yourself in, you'd have to be pretty dull and unexcited about your possibilities and potential. people who kill themselves where already dead to begin with in a way. anyways, when i have some spare time i'll read and post some thoughts on your work as well. your short stories seem like they would hold much better at a careful read than the haste in which i would have to apply to read them at the moment. so for now, thanks for your thoughts - dan
I want to thank you so much for your very kind comments on my poem "Christmas 1779"! I do so appreciate what you have to say. You mention my use of perfect and "imprefect" rhyme, however, I think my only use of possible imprefect rhyme in this poem might be rhyming "dawn" with "gone"....but thanks a million! michael