--Elite Writer Alias: Jessa Name: Jessa Fritzges ASL: 29/f/pa Website:[ Education ] Days Away: 565 Life Story: not telling [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 7 Forum Posts: 0 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 4855 D 13.3 Years 1.33 Decades 161.83 Months 693.57 Weeks 4.855000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: Alas poor Yorick, I ate his brains
I guess it was a simple and childish romantic thought, but the wierd things that night does to the view of a landscape .. they kind of make for romantic thoughts!
The range of hills I was looking at is the Warrumbungles, a collection of eroded volcanoes in wildly improbable shapes, in the midst of which squats a major astronomical observatory! Because the stars are astonishingly bright in the local sky. I was actually writing some poems to submit to the local newspaper, with metaphors or allegories that the local folk would get a buzz out of. I am amazed that the foreign commentors on this poem seem to see the image of the wild-looking skyline too! Just goes to show that real readers are psychic, I think.
Well actually, you just reaffirmed my confidence in just the same way!
There are lots of people in this website who seem to just want to get new members for their Bummer & Downer Club. I think what impresses me about your work is that (1) it really is work - the poems sort of make up one book - and (2) you are fighting on the side of the makers and menders, you didn't join the self-destructive mob even when they got you. I really do hope you live long and become a monster like me, or whatever else you would enjoy most!
I can criticize your verse more closely than I did. I'll keep on trying to do that. Short of time online, so I tend to be slow or away ... I guess we are all like that, though, so you will understand.
Was being a smartass ... forget it, sorry. I keep on forgetting there are not many sorts of conversation folk can have in this medium!
Anyway, I'm impressed by the deep meaning of your poetic project, your determination to transmit experience, your persistence in composing the series no matter what else is going on. Your artistic courage in using your own story to the full. This is super-genuine poetry, the sort of example that ... maybe scares off the fainthearted!!
Thank you for checking out my suggestion. I would have to further argue that, although you may think that mine was written better, I think that yours was the best. See, you captured the feel for the whole nation, I just captured the view of people who care about what's happening to America. There's a difference, however distinct is not the point.