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    This has changed fundamentally. Sad kinda, seems like there are only a few people hanging around.

    I have the feeling this has somehow become more of a place to tell other people how good they are (there are literally comments just saying "I liked it, well done"), not to contribute constructive critique, but I won't jump on that train. What's the purpose of this if it's just blowing sugar in your rear end? fuck that.

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    | Posted on 2013-01-23 06:42:19 | by isabella - [ Reply to This ] -
    Thank you for commenting on Flowers. Wow….that was possibly the longest critique I’ve received for the shortest poem I’ve written ! Thank you for taking so much time & putting in so much thought about this. It is interesting to hear how others view your work, of course a lot of this has to do with each readers perspective, their own experiences & understanding of the world as they know it. You probably put too much thought into it because… to explain it simply, I just write, I don’t sit down & think “I’m going to write a poem about this or that”. I didn’t consider the protagonist or what message I’m sending about myself or what the fictional protagonist’s personality may be from each line. Honestly that kind of writing is so poetry college class—there is no feeling in it. It’s constructed by intellectualism & not with emotion. 1st---the poem is about me. I only write from another’s perspective when I’m writing fictional stories. 2nd--What I meant by that poem is exactly what I wrote. I’m basically just stating a fact, I have no words for trees, butterflies & birds, I can only write about what has hurt me. I disagree with the notion that the poem contradicts itself or makes the “protagonist” look unable to reflect on themselves clearly because I merely mentioned butterflies & birds. The mentioning was only to say that I can’t write about such things, I didn’t elaborate on the beauty of butterflies or the majesty of birds. Also, the question to the reader is exactly that, a question to the reader about what else they could want from me, I am a poet, not a storyteller in this instance, I am relaying/revealing my own faults, flaws etc as a poet. It may just be me but there is an element of your critique that comes off very much like you’re trying to put me down. But mostly it comes off like you’re a self-proclaimed professor of prose & this overly done critique was written mainly to satisfy your own desire & to show how superior you think you are. Although, I hope you had a good time writing it. Ps….I don't want my ego stroked, honestly I could give a sh*t less what anyone thinks, but I also didn't find anything helpful in your critique. It was truly boring & just made you sound like a pompous ass.
    | Posted on 2013-01-18 17:36:18 | by C. Starr - [ Reply to This ] -
    Bahaha @ the amount of I's as well as your disapproval of them
    | Posted on 2013-01-15 16:52:09 | by MmR - [ Reply to This ] -
    (insert big cheesy grin here).
    | Posted on 2013-01-15 07:13:46 | by isabella - [ Reply to This ] -
    While everyone wants their ego stroked, it's also imperative to knock that ego down to an appropriate level. I myself am well aware I'm not the greatest at writing and mostly do it as a therapeutic method. However I would hate to only hear "I liked it, we'll done" when sometime even I know it was shit. Ya dig? And you, my friend tell it like it is. And then you explain why it is the way it is. Of course it's also nice to get those comments of connection... Another person understanding exactly where you're coming from. Which I've noticed you try to find that connection as well. I guess what I'm saying is you give a shit and it shows in your comments. And for that sir, I thank you. Lol. Have a great evening
    | Posted on 2013-01-14 19:28:10 | by MmR - [ Reply to This ] -
    so, i recently read a poem, no need to say which one. I just wanted to point out that I enjoyed your comment on it more than the actual poem.
    | Posted on 2013-01-14 16:48:41 | by MmR - [ Reply to This ] -

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