Thanks for commenting on my piece. I can understand what you mean by druggies and whores but I have to disagree. I think everyone can be part of that negative and therefore should be included. Somehow I think even those still hope for something better or appreciate butterflies. I'll have to think about that before I decide to take it out.
I put the poem in stanzas if you'd ever like to read it again. I believe it would be more coherent.