--Elite Writer Alias: Jussy Name: Justin Cloud ASL: 21 ...guy....waterworld Website:[ Education ] Days Away: 3854 Life Story: wanderer [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 2 Forum Posts: 0 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 5306 D 14.54 Years 1.45 Decades 176.87 Months 758 Weeks 5.306000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: I see through the darkness, my way back home
Yes I am a Christian. And yes, I was implying that I have walked with him before in heaven. We've all been to heaven. We were there before and some are going back. Doesn't the bible say so? Well, anyway, thank you for your critique.
Jussy, Thanks for commenting on my poem, "Invincible Not." And, hard as it is to believe, I enjoyed hearing a dissenting view of my poem. I think sometimes everyone is just a little too afraid to add some constructive criticism to a comment. I agree with you, I thought it could be better, and it wasn't a poem I really put my heart into anyways. I tend to write more nostalgic or happy poems than dark. This one was just really forced for me, do you have any ideas how I could improve it? Take care. ~Jen~