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    please remove your comment from my post? I really do appreciate you taking the time to comment. but t don't know how to disable comments on my posts and I write on here only for me and I just really don't need negativity on something that is only for myself.

    thanks so much.
    | Posted on 2012-11-24 01:38:36 | by crashley - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hey! Thanks for stopping by and for commenting on "burnt". Appreciate it a lot;-)

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-11-01 00:03:53 | by jeniecel - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    In response to your critique. I was going more for a mood or tone in that poem. Language is good for that.

    The mood or tone is one of emptiness and of the mechanical. It could almost be about a person lying in a coma. It's kind of a cold, gray poem in that way-- except at the end there is an alliterative flourish and fire, which could be a kind of hope or relief from the pervasive gray mechanical feeling.
    | Posted on 2012-10-29 19:39:35 | by lolaxelmo - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thank you for your comments. i know my spelling sucks. i need to befriend the spell check i just never go back and read what i write. i just write and submit. thanks for reading it though.
    | Posted on 2012-10-21 09:36:05 | by joezwells - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks for your comment. Your understanding of what I was trying to convey was pretty astute. Nice of you to say you'll continue to think about it. I agree, that's what they should do. Best of luck.
    | Posted on 2012-10-20 08:24:14 | by closetpoet - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thank you...for your kind words. Simple...is good.
    ~K~
    | Posted on 2012-10-19 20:56:36 | by KimmyMim - [ Reply to This ] -



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