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Thanks for your comment on "System." There's a lot of symbolism and meaning worked into it, and I'm glad that the main point was evidently illustrated in how the line breaks off at the end. Did you also note that each verse's beginning letter spells down system, thrice, and the last line begins man?
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| Posted on 2010-09-29 07:31:09 | by coloredstone - [ Reply to This ] - |
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Thank you for your comment on my most recent submission. Coincidently I too have not been on this site in a very long time. This was the first submission of mine in over a year.
Again, thanks for the feedback. |
| Posted on 2010-09-29 03:01:29 | by nomad knight - [ Reply to This ] - |
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Hey mate, cheers 4 your comments on "Nutrition". Sorry it's taken me ages to get back, been off site for a while.
Right then, I'm gonna say the same to you as I said to the other bloke: The piece was written in trochaic trimeter, there was nothing wrong with the meter. I added an unstressed syllable at the start of some lines, but that's perfectly acceptable. The piece was written in half-rhyme (assonance.) Glad u liked the story. I did think about presenting it line-by-line. What no one seems to have noticed is that it was an irony poem. Anyway, cheers! |
| Posted on 2009-07-04 10:33:37 | by alexboy - [ Reply to This ] - |
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Hey mate, cheers 4 your comments on "Nutrition". Sorry it's taken me ages to get back, been off site for a while.
Right then, I'm gonna say the same to you as I said to the other bloke: The piece was written in trochaic trimeter, there was nothing wrong with the meter. I added an unstressed syllable at the start of some lines, but that's perfectly acceptable. The piece was written in half-rhyme (assonance.) Glad u liked the story. I did think about presenting it line-by-line. What no one seems to have noticed is that it was an irony poem. Anyway, cheers! |
| Posted on 2009-07-04 10:32:54 | by alexboy - [ Reply to This ] - |
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Thank you very much for your comment! And welcome back to Elite Skills :D
- Sarah o.O |
| Posted on 2009-06-24 15:57:45 | by EdwardScissorhands - [ Reply to This ] - |
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you are a great person i just thought you shold know... ok well later.
Shygirl over and out... ;) |
| Posted on 2008-01-24 15:09:57 | by shygirl - [ Reply to This ] - |