Hey thanks for returning the favor and commenting on "Spring of Awakening". That was very thoughtful of you. lol and thanks for recommending the editting, but I think I'm going to keep it as it is...the lines were supposed to repeat since the poem was somewhat of a hidden dialogue and the narrator read it in discomfort until they would reach the words "And yet..". But that's okay We all have different opinions. Take care <3
Thanx for your comment, but I well tell you that it's a work in progress. I hope to finish it when the music stops playing in my head. While the music plays I write poetry. Thanx again The Poor Man's Poet.
Hey, you, thanks a lot for the feedback. It feels like I never get feedback when I'm on here so yeah. Anyway the character that is "falling out of love" is really me. And it's something I can't help and it's just... well it's sad and the other person(dot dot dot) doesn't really desrve to have their heart broken. sigh. :D smilie anywayz