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    Thank you for the comments on "Dream" I appreciate your honesty, but when you make comments it would be better to say the words didn't convey the emotions rather then i didnt put any emotion into it. I will consider rewriting the poem to include a better image of the dream, but the purpose of the last line is to bring that closure that is needed for the reader to understand that at the end of the dream my less perfect life starts. In "Dream" the first stanza was the dream and the second was the dreams end. It is possible I just didn't get the idea across that I ment too. I was trying to give a similar feeling as my other poem "Wake Up" with my dreams being perfect and my actual life being sad. Thank you for your input and I will consider everything you said.
    | Posted on 2007-04-01 16:18:32 | by DeeBaby6389 - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thanks for the comment. What do you think of this:

    His hands shook as he unbuttoned her dress,
    Gazing at water rings left on tables
    the mental art of a collapsed sigh against a falling breast.

    Instead of the former use of an expletive.

    -Wayward
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 16:02:29 | by Waywarddaughter - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks for your comments.
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 12:59:31 | by never_far_away - [ Reply to This ] -



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