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    Chapter 12, Part 2 Continued........

    A/N: I'm not having a good day, but this will take my mind off of it. :cry: Hope you guys enjoy. And before I go, this doesn't relate to my story, but..... Anorexia SUCKS!! It hurts EVERYBODY. It takes over your F@#$%$g mind!! People should never have to go through something like that.... And I am not anorexic by the way...... I know that I don't understand, and that I probably never will. But I can say this honestly, it hurts me just as much.
    It's a serious disorder, and it SHOULD NOT be happening.... but it is and there's nothing I can do to stop it.... All I can do is be here and do my best to remain patient.... Being patient and not getting angry is the hardest thing to do when you me, though....








    Later that evening, Natalia and Olivia lay in their bed. Dinner was Lasagna, and after wards, they talked for a couple of hours as Vela slept soundly.

    She was still sleeping, in the crib in which they had bought for her. It was pink and had little lambs painted on it. Natalia had picked it out. The minute she saw it, she had to buy it. No objections came from Olivia either.

    "I'm just going to go check on her really quick...." Natalia jumped out of the bed. "God, It's like I'm the one who just gave birth. I'm freaking out, and your Miss Laid back over there...." She looked down at the baby's chest, wtaching it rise and fall. it gave her the conformation she needed, and she went to lay back down.

    "Emma was a quiet baby.... She rarely ever cried. I was scared and nervous at first. I got up every five minutes to check on her. Then gradually, those minutes turned to hours, and then those hours became longer. I finally got to the point where I could sleep normally again, without worrying."

    "Rafe cried all the time. He was such an melodramatic child..." She giggled.

    "Hmmm... really. Never would have guessed." Olivia smiled.

    "But he was also pretty well behaved for the most part. I can't recall him ever sneaking out...."

    "Hey! Emma just wanted to see her daddy!" Liv defended her daughter.

    "Oh, Olivia, you know I was only joking. I love that little girl. She's so smart, and she's got a hell of a lotta guts to do some of the things she's done!"

    "YOU said the 'h' word, and I believe we are in the presence of a little, innocent, baby...." Olivia pointed out. Natalia slapped her.

    "Go to bed..."

    "Okay, okay..." Olivia reached for the lamp, but Natalia stopped her.... "What?"

    "Ugh, can we leave it on. For tonight... It's her first night home. What if something happens?"

    Olivia smiled, understandingly. "Okay."


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    Ah but it WAS positive.

    If you look at my latest critiques youll find Im hard to please.

    But Im not a biggot,I read a lot of poetry and I can sincerely tell you that yes,because of those lines the whole poem is awfull.

    Each piece of writing is the sum of its parts.

    If I baked you a lovely cake,then dumped grease all over the thing,would you say:

    "it was enjoyable except for the fact you nearly poisened me"?

    I suppose that depends on how open you are to analogies.

    But honestly "a decent stab towards something great",you should be content with that,its actually very generous of me considering its so short,but I liked the concept,you just left a real bananna skin at the end.

    As for my critique,does it really hurt to lie to someone?

    You answered your own question,I wonder if you take your writing that seriously,do you want to be lied to?

    I certainly dont.

    Good luck in your endevours.

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-04-25 21:34:39 | by Raphael - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Yea I know what you mean. I hardly ever get on here either. Just randomly do I think of something to write..a lot of things I loved don't really exist anymore lol
    | Posted on 2009-04-20 15:21:47 | by Strator - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hi there piper,
    I haven't been on here in awhile....how have you been??
    | Posted on 2009-03-12 20:13:57 | by Strator - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thanks for the commit on If I could,though I know it does need some work done on it I'm glad so many of you poets found it a delight,once again thanks for taking the time to read it
    adnil
    | Posted on 2009-02-20 06:41:19 | by adnil - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Wasn't from me, I rarely vote unless something just blows me away. But Meh isn't good or lbad, it like srugging your sholders.
    | Posted on 2009-02-08 17:27:33 | by nicodemous - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Just wanted to stop by and say thanks for the critiques, I really appreciate it. ^_^
    | Posted on 2009-01-26 01:50:06 | by I_Bleed_Ink - [ Reply to This ] -



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