--Elite Writer Alias: Porcelaine Name: Sandra Kazalac ASL: 27/F/Croatia Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Days Away: 1328 Life Story: Exorcism [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 31 Forum Posts: 56 Shoutbox Posts: 4 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 4346 D 11.91 Years 1.19 Decades 144.87 Months 620.86 Weeks 4.346000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: We, soldiers of a different sort, We, wasters of ink and page, We, warriors of words, Masters of melancholy, harlots of the pen, We bleed these volumes, and expect only absolution. - Jarvis Black
I see I can not comment on single poems. Might be my stats, since ... since ages I have not been around these realms, where I really know only you.
But I'm glad I did today, "come around".
I like your "Dormitory" ... like very few minds perhaps you create metaphors that remind me of fractal geometry: they contain self-images and alien-images, they represent and they distort, they relate to reality, yet show images far away, from everything we know by eyes.
A little correction: 3rd stanza, 3rd line: I think you mean "than", not "then".
You got the gist of what I was going for in
"the moon shines brighter", that we are part of the cosmos and affected by it - that mixed with our natural selves, we tend to a more intense feeling of life whether it's love or hate. Glad you liked the way I put it together. Thanks.