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    Thanks for you comment on Satan's Child it was just a quicky <ha ha> I liked it and posted it but I'm glad you liked it and thanks for taking a peek I will return the favor, oh and sorry it took me so long to reply back been gone for a while.. have a good one!!

    Penny
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 22:36:56 | by pennymarie - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thank you for your comment on a Pair Potrait of Beauty. I changed singular to single, and it looks better. I'm glad you liked it, i hope my friends will too.

    :) tennisfuzz
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 08:11:47 | by tennisfuzz - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hey! You're the first to comment on Shadowstone, thanks .
    Firstly, that piece was one of my most impulsive works, I hardly edited anything within it because I just couldn't bear to. It's labelled as Elemental Saga VI because it IS part of that epic. Well the title put you off, the prose did otherwise
    There's no "the" meant before fiery phoenix, because there's already too many prepositions and conjuctions and currently I'm trying to cut down on them.
    Metamorphosized sounded better than morphed. Haha.
    Thanks again, and for the faves add. Hope to see you round.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-03-08 06:21:15 | by Azuire - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks for the comment... it kind of made me smile... the image you had. It's funny because, that was the general purpose of the poem, minus maybe the racial implications. I guess the only hint that may have given you that outcome was the quoted part, and believe me those words do come from a black man, but it was more of a quote to myself in this piece. When I write pieces I let sounds from inside my mind come out, and I chose words based on those sounds.. If I have a ate' sound... I might write dissipate, you get what I'm saying? And so, at the time, I kept thinking of his saying that once.

    But yes.. overall, the image you got was basically what I was painting out, given that what the kids on stage are saying is somewhat being heard. Is it a crime to want to scream at a crowd of people?

    Outlaw
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 15:28:28 | by Outlaw - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    HEY JAY THANK U SO MUCH FOR YOUR COMMENT! I WILL WORK ON THE PIECE. I JUST HAD ALL THESE FEELINGS AND HAD TO LET THEM OUT AT THAT SECOND.MY, MY, THUMBS UP FOR YOU, JAY :) PLZ FEEL FREE TO COMMENT ON MY OTHER PIECES. THEY ARE ALL IMPROMPTU...I JUST SIT DOWN AND TYPE WHAT IM FEELING, YA KNOW?
    -LOLAVIE
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 10:06:43 | by lolavie - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thanks for the comment, and i'll def. try to play around with it.
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