--Elite Writer Alias: Rachel Ruff Name: Baby Ray ASL: 16/F/Loving, USA Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Education ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 1 Life Story: Sad/Pathetic [ Ignore User ]
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I tried but the syntax is too bad,I can kind of see what you getting at but...
there is no question of beauty,beauty is as real and un-important as anything else that exists (transparently or no),some things are pleasing to the senses,some are not
but your poem,I think if you read it carefully youll find its as in-coherent as I said
not to dish your writing by any means,
but that particular piece could do with improvement,
It's tough, it's always tough when things get gritty and complicated like that. So sure, your life has had a few turns that most people never go through, but you are obviously intelligent, thoughtful, and reasonable enough to overcome even those treacherous and troubling obstacles.
You need a break, as you said yourself, so talk to your therapist, tell them what you need, ask them for guidance in finding yourself a way to break free for a few days, sometimes people need that isolation, your therapist should understand, and hopefully offer either solutions for physical seperation from the daily grind, or a method of closing your mind off, meditating and just... Getting a new handle on your tumultuous life.
But even then, you see a lot more self-posessed than most folks your age, and in that I have faith you can pull through. If nothing else, go watch the movie "What About Bob?", the main character is eventually told to simply take a vacation from himself. Every time a problem comes up, he simply needs to remind himself that he is on vacation from himself, and as such will not allow that problem to bother him.
It might also work for you.
At any rate, you might find that you need a true escape, and on that premise, you might just need a single day to flee, find a beautiful place to just... sit.
Look off into the distance, find a field, a forest, a lake, anything, find something you've never seen up close and drive, or have somebody drive you. Don't worry about consequences or difficulties, just go, drive an hour or two on a beautiful day and just reflect. Rest where you end up, play, sing, read, observe nature and people and the goings on of a place far removed from your own. And when that day is done, and you are back home, you can explain to everyone why you left, and how much better you feel for it.
Don't get discouraged about someone not liking your writing. It's your personal thoughts and feelings, you're never wrong about you those. You are going to be your own worst critic. Take the good and the bad, and brush off the bad. All you can do is laugh at them because they didn't get what you were meaning and move on! Thanks for the favorite add!
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