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| Well, I want to thank you for your comments on both of my poems. I am happy that you liked tham, and I was glad that you decided to share your thoughts. Thanks!
Be well, ~Azura* |
| | Posted on 2007-05-19 11:13:50 | by EmpathicAya - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Thanks again for the dauntingly long comment. Don't take that wrong, I enjoy it when people point out what is wrong with what I write. Anyway. Corrections have been made.
I had to agree though, the first ending was stronger so I replaced it. Thanks a bunch for the help. And the flabbergasted is gone...it was kind of funny to have it there. Bri |
| | Posted on 2007-04-17 16:28:58 | by Briannan - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| I updated that scene a little bit. I want to hear what you think about it now. You were right the confused were a bit weak and i changed them. thanks for the help. I hope you like it better now.
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| | Posted on 2007-04-16 11:35:43 | by Briannan - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Thanks for the comment on one of my pieces, I wrote it a while back about my boyfriend in the states, its a long distance thing and we only talk like once a week at best, and always over the phone. Its hard to keep up and I know that there is someone back there with him who has fallen for him but I am trusting that he feels the same way about me as I do him. So the 'are already' I wrote is sort of in between two meanings, like he is starting to and he has already fallen for her, so its...she is trying and almost succeeding.
Thanks again for the comment, I am glad you understood it and I will think about changing it up a bit, I wrote it a while ago so Im not sure if I will use the insight I have now or try to retrace my steps and regain teh same point of view. Peace, ~flora~ |
| | Posted on 2007-04-12 18:16:49 | by blankscreen - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Wow, thank you so very much for commenting on my recently submitted poem titled "Please Lord"...amazed by the length of your comment but what you had to say had some truth to it. I appericate your opinon and point of view on the topic thank you so very much!
~!*Jackie*!~ |
| | Posted on 2007-04-11 13:29:20 | by jackz - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Re: What you stand for and what you don't...okay, let me first just say WOWZA!!! Why don't you tell us how you really feel?? Hi, I'm new here so don't take my comments as anything other than what they are: comments. I respectfully disagree with most of what you said, except the part about us all having to die before world peace is a reality...actually, that isn't accurate; "world peace," if you will, will happen when Jesus comes back; but I won't get into that as I don't want this to become an ugly thing about God.
Well, I must say that I am pretty certain that this country can not be all that bad, especially since you and anyone else has the freedom to critize our government. George Bush may or may not be a smart man, we may never know the answer to that question, but one thing that I feel strongly about it that this war, whatever it started out as, has now morphed into something altogether different. I have a brother, career military in the sense that he was in military during first Gulf War, and served during that time in the Middle East. Currently, he has been working as a security advisor, working for a company contracted with the military in Afganistan. Prior to that he was doing the same job basically in Bosnia, Croatia, and Kosovo, during Malosowich's reign. My father is also retired military. My point is this, whether or not we charged into Iraq with no real proof of weapons of mass destruction, the people there, now, those who want democracy and a stable ecomony for themeselves...not the insurgents, not Al Queda, not Hamas...but the innocents, who have lived under a reign of tierny, torture, fear, death squads, etc. etc., it is now for those people that we, the US, the country that invaded Iraq, should at the very least stick it out until there is a shred of stability that is believable. That may not happen for a long time; but every soldier serving the US military, whether they agree with the war or not, signed on the dotted line, and war is apart of peace and security...as much of an oxy-moron as that it. Since when did the American people adopt the attitude that we just cut and run because the people don't agree? Don't mention Vietnam please...different circumstances that I'd love to discuss some other time. If those who do not believe that the US is an honorable country, including those living here, would have us cut and run and desert those INNOCENT people we've left with no government, no structure, no stablity, than that would make it true: we would have no honor. I do believe, with all my marrow that we are our brother's keeper...I am my brother's keeper. As far as the rest, if I respond right now, I'll be up until Sunday...ha ha ha, but I shall return. I actually must concede that while we are on different planes, you make for thought provoking...thougts...Your words forced me to really take a side and be willing to stick to them. |
| | Posted on 2007-03-23 05:18:25 | by Ironbutterfly - [ Reply to This ] - |
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