--Elite Writer Alias: Sepheroth432 Name: Justin Laban ASL: 24/Male/Michigan Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Education ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 30 Life Story: Fading faith in Love [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 24 Forum Posts: 2 Shoutbox Posts: 1 RP Posts: 496 Signup Date: 4249 D 11.64 Years 1.16 Decades 141.63 Months 607 Weeks 4.249000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: I cry for the memories lost, even the bad ones. - ME!
I can't remember your poem, but I know well the absence of the muse. Frustating to say the least, it's where I am at the minute, and I've done a few 'takes' on old nursery rhymes to break the spell. If you have time, have a look, it might help break your block too! Cheers Ted.
For some reason I didn't see the alert for your comment on "Vertigo" until today, my bad. -facepalm- so sorry...
So anyway, I'm really glad the imagery was that awesome for you! And I was kind of, in the last two lines, trying to give the feeling that this phoenix isn't perfect. It's fireless. It's not what a phoenix should be. It's differen, almost "broken," hence the falling because the heat of the flames isn't there to lift it up. But phoenizes always have wings, am I correct? Hence the rising when the phoenix finds its song... or something...
thank you for commenting again, lol.. i will take ur advice and see what i can come up with to make the poem batter.. it was very hard to even get the words on paper, it most of the time its not hard its just hard to revise it lol. but thank you for ur advice and ill see where it leads me
thank you again for commenting on my poem, i feel bad that u could understand my work on that level only because i u had to be hurt, but i am happy to know u understand lol.. i will try and consider what u said about not waiting for him. thank you again for your comment..
if u ever wanna talk about writing to anything at all u can ask me for my sm..lol
hey thanks again for commentin on another one for my poems... i wore it as a way to try and help me get over him being dead even thought he died when i was 10monts old.. i only know stories and have pics i dont remember him at all.. and im very sorry to hear that u dont know whob ur dad is. but thank u for liking my poem