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Sheakhan

Name: Keegan Gilmore
ASL: 25/M/Washington
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Might as well post occasionally here. Couldn't hurt, most everyone who is out to get me is gone now, not that I minded overly much then. Hope the site has picked up a bit, I see a lot of new poets. We shall see.

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The Best Guardian Knows When to Turn a Blind Eye
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Descend
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Luminous Lips
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Mandatory, Obligatory, Bullshit
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Settle my Lungs
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Dervish Subdued
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This Verbosity Suits, a Recollection Tentative.
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Captain Butcher MacValentine
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Nowheres
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When Dreaming
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Ode to Walking Street (sans ode)
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Sweet Southwestern Earth
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Dionysus for President
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Saffron
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Requiem Reef
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The Precept of Humble Time
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The Guise of Fear: Part the Second
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Displacing the Sun
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Shades of Gray
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Thank you for reading the "sonnet" but I'm really confused by both comments saying there is an extra syllable somewhere (I keep counting and cant find one tho). Yours pointed out the line, finally... tired is 1 syllable, isn't it? I looked it up, it should just be one. I'm not arguing, I'm just double-checking. Of course, prism is supposed 1 syllable, although really it's 2... maybe I need to change the word "tired" to something else. Everybody is all southern on this site :)

Thank you for the helpful comment tho. The guy I wrote it for liked it at least :) He says he is going to drive here from TX to meet me. It's brought me good things, that write.

PS: I appreciate you pointing out the overuse of certain words, and I'm going to work on that... you've been very helpful, thank you!

| Posted on 2012-12-09 15:52:11 | by EmptyBox - [ Reply to This ] -

Thanks for the comments :)

Althea~

| Posted on 2011-08-07 13:39:20 | by AltheaLaochra - [ Reply to This ] -

Thank you Sheakhan, that's high praise indeed.
Nothing like RL dramas and foibles over past lovers to bring out those poems, I guess.

Appreciated

| Posted on 2011-08-07 10:24:47 | by trinityfinger - [ Reply to This ] -

hey thanks for the comments and suggestions on "acoustic"--will take all into consideration...thanks for stopping by my work..

jacob

| Posted on 2011-08-07 09:32:30 | by jacoberin - [ Reply to This ] -

I SEES YOU ON THE COMMUNITY PAGE.
Hai der.

| Posted on 2010-07-17 11:13:47 | by JenFlynn - [ Reply to This ] -

I like it Keeg. You know I'm a sucker for well structured rhyme, particularly when it doesn't feel forced. More than anything though, it just makes me want to say congratulations again. I'm glad it's working for the two of you. And in-house inspiration has to be a good thing.

Keep it up bud.

| Posted on 2010-02-06 20:34:38 | by RisingSon - [ Reply to This ] -

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