--Elite Writer Alias: SinisterDilemma Name: Kayame Akira ASL: 16/F/tx Website:[ Website ] Days Away: 3 Life Story: over 4 yrs on ES [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 0 Forum Posts: 0 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 54 Signup Date: 68 D 0.19 Years 0.02 Decades 2.27 Months 9.71 Weeks 6.800000e+6 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: It's not bullying...it's physical motivation for you to SHUT THE FUCK UP, BITCH! ~me and my friend Jack~
I rather liked that pink kimono story you wrote. It's a nice story-line. I think, tho, there is some shade missing... it seems--I don't have a huge vocabulary, so bear with my horrible attempts describing what I mean-- It feels like a story of compilations, of statements about, instead of being the story. Does that make sense? Like, you aren't IN the story... You're hearing about what happened from moment to moment. It's like compiled data, good data mind you!, but... put there. It didn't create a place you were in, merely something you were watching. I'm not [censored]ing or bashing, just observing how I felt reading it... hope it helps and I didn't say it wrong.
hello. so i suppose my computers being a butt face but i couldnt figure out how to comment on your writing, the text box was missing but oh well.
i thought the lunatic writer was great, hummm just little phrases you put in there that i liked, and the revenge of the char characters. how your thoughts become actions, twisted thoughts start to actually mess up your life. well i liked it.
and falling up, how magic is a finicky little thing, passion can be destroyed in just a blink with the wrong words.
and dont mind raphael, hes a crank but he knows what he's talking about. i think your style is cool, getting inspiration from quotes and songs and little things you hear, thats what everyone does, i think you just need to find your own little twist to put on things, make them purely you. something i could read and before i look at the name ill know you wrote it. the best way to find that flair is to write and write till your fingers about fall off. itll come. so yeah, dont let people bashing you break your spirit. keep writing always.
I'm not the one writing a horrendous amount of tennag angst poetry. Do you think your the only person who knows the difference between a band and Nirvana as a state of mind? My point was you were quoting the bands lyrics, theres no point lying about it now. Where else did you get the term heart-shaped box? Even if you didn't do it intentionally, don't try to make it out as if ppl are retards for making the assumption, your the one who doesn't know your s.hit enough to make it clear. Whatever, blah blah blah, don't bother writing back because you can't even form coherrent sentences. Put me on the ignore list or something, or don't bother. Clogging up the submits page with no explaination is rude full stop, I don't care what the reason is, especially when your writing is so lacklustre.
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