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(that is a bit what I was also getting at in my comment of your poem. Some of my criticism wasn't maent to be taken at point value, or on any level, simply because it leaves you in a powerless position. It is composed of blank words; unbiased advice.
That is where my sense of humour came into play.. I was applying you to you in an attempt at a parody -- but I won't lie, I can't be mean without gifting certain nice deeds, hence my comment seeming semi-constructive.)
The thing is.. are you the average reader on ES, in the united states, from mars?
There is no poster-boy for the average poetry reader. There is no unbiased position. Poetry is really an introspective game between the poet and their poetry, and if you become involve in that cycle.. you have to come with open hands. In essence, you are here (in the arena of poetry) because you are a human being, the poet is a human being, and their poetry is a typed up expression of the fact that they're human. It's pervasively oppugnant and almost insulting to pretend like it's anything else.
And if you had a daughter, or a son.. would you criticize them.. or guide them where you could?
And if we're all, only human... Selfish in needing attention, and in want... yet beautifully tragic.. etc..
I misread the sense of what you meant with "too overplayed" hence me calling my own sense of humour [censored]ed up. It's clear to me that I do tend to take things a little further than most would enjoy...
Adding to this, you referred to someone who was unknown to me, and naturally I played it off by saying what I said. If you look at it, the first few lines, and think about it for a moment.. what I said essentially amounts to things which are true in all cases, and vague prodding for more information (let's not be mean = do you like this other person, and if not, do you mean to say you dislike me?).
What do you mean, exactly?
I mean, why do you bother to gander about and offer people criticism.. your first page alone (when I first came) was littered with unappreciative replies to your comments. Which begs the question: why do you bother? And the question is only really begged given the reader (myself) because I've found myself in quite similar circumstances in the past... and I always asked myself that question.