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lol awesome. i had that song stuck in my head for years, not knowing what it was, until i was in the musical grease and it was in the dance scene hehe!
You were right in suggesting ech lne to be a seperate poem. However there was some connection, the balloon in what we are focusing on, and the idea to carve it.
The second line talks about holding in air, I was thinking of the thin line that seperates the air inside the balloon from the air outside. Because the person is standing here imagining a way to carve the balloon and not pop it. The fences allude to a piece by august Wilson, a play I saw done not too long ago. And then I added the dual perspective to just give an idea of what I mean, an elaboration of the Fences metaphor, though I think i might have done rather poorly. It could use work. The duality is a suggestion that there is more than one perspective to this piece so all the words are widely open to interpretation depending on the individual.
the wooden handle is just an attempt at imagery to remind the reader that the job at hand is carving the ballon. The "wooden" part was suppose to run a parallel to all types of materials used. And wooden gives off a flexible "carvable" open-minded setting.
Then I move on to the progress of the job, so far so good.
And here we see that what we were trying to carve here was not about a human face, but a watch face, time. The rest of the lines just go back to the original idea of open perspective and the fences we build. We can't know if the job was succesful but we do know that in practice it allowed freedom.
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