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    Thanks Sparkster, your comment is well received and I appreciate your praise on Birdsong Dawn. I am glad you liked the similies established for day and night.
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 07:59:29 | by oixi - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hey mate,

    Thanks very much for your comments on Barmania (Ext). I'm glad you liked it! :)
    | Posted on 2008-12-02 13:52:20 | by alexboy - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hey there,

    With regard to your comments on "BARMANIA": Your wish is my command! I have now extended it by several verses! Check out "BARMANIA(EXT VERSION)".

    Cheers, Alex
    | Posted on 2008-10-31 11:02:34 | by alexboy - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Cheers for your comments on "Barmania". Another person said they wanted it to be longer, but it was just a limmerick! Maybe I'll extend it...

    Alex
    | Posted on 2008-10-21 11:39:27 | by alexboy - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Just cut them out, like this:

    You once took my eyes for a ride
    and my legs decided to follow.
    I threw my doubts to the wind for
    those magical seven digits.


    You showed me the scars and bruises
    life left on your heart.
    In return I showed you what love looks like
    in a build-a-bear box,
    in a darkened movie theater,
    in an abandoned living room.


    You left my unfamiliar love for
    the comfort of recognizable pain.
    I opened the door for you
    day after week after month after year
    as you sought solace in my weakness


    But don't forget;
    memory lane leads to Lynnhaven mall
    where you can always find a remnant
    of what we had.

    "Just don't be afraid if you catch a glimpse of us two, walking hand in hand, in a shiny store window."

    Now I wrote those last 3 lines just to inspire you. I would never modify someone elses poem like that. Maybe it will inspire you to write a better ending. Or you could leave your last stanza like it is without the last line. That would make it sound more honest. I hope I've helped.
    | Posted on 2008-10-16 20:40:40 | by Paradox - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Hello. Thank you for your comment on my poem. It means a lot to me. :)

    Love, Eliza XX
    | Posted on 2008-06-26 07:26:14 | by Piper - [ Reply to This ] -



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