Favorites: 5 Forum Posts: 0 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 4467 D 12.24 Years 1.22 Decades 148.9 Months 638.14 Weeks 4.467000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: "Life is fragile, handle with prayer."
You once took my eyes for a ride
and my legs decided to follow.
I threw my doubts to the wind for
those magical seven digits.
You showed me the scars and bruises
life left on your heart.
In return I showed you what love looks like
in a build-a-bear box,
in a darkened movie theater,
in an abandoned living room.
You left my unfamiliar love for
the comfort of recognizable pain.
I opened the door for you
day after week after month after year
as you sought solace in my weakness
But don't forget;
memory lane leads to Lynnhaven mall
where you can always find a remnant
of what we had.
"Just don't be afraid if you catch a glimpse of us two, walking hand in hand, in a shiny store window."
Now I wrote those last 3 lines just to inspire you. I would never modify someone elses poem like that. Maybe it will inspire you to write a better ending. Or you could leave your last stanza like it is without the last line. That would make it sound more honest. I hope I've helped.