Name: Kris . . . just Kris.
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Everybody who is born will die, but if in rapture of burning on I find myself truely alive, I would gladly bear the consumption.
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You might wanna try hitting up the new site. Finnigan, Kael, and a few others have moved that way. Eliteskills.com/nrp
|| Posted on 2011-09-09 14:10:56 | by Black Angel - [ Reply to This ] -|
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on 'Not once did I ever fly'. At first, I was hesitant to make any change to it, as I usually go with whatever I write at the time, with whatever comes out when the mood strikes me. I guess I'm a stickler for the raw, pure feeling, and not much one for editing or revision. However, seeing as several people find the second stanza weak and ill-fitting, I removed it entirely, seeing the first stanza is strong by itself.
Again, I'm glad that you liked the piece. I was really surprised that I received such positive commentary on it. That makes me feel good to know that people can still appreciate the sad stuff, seeing as that is all I can seem to write anymore.
Oh what I would give to sing of joy!
But joy has long departed, like geese in the winter,
and here I am left wandering,
wandering these fields of sorrow.
|| Posted on 2011-05-07 08:30:47 | by AsiaticFox - [ Reply to This ] -|
thank you for the comments on the impending piece...
on the period...i used it there, though i often don't end poems with any punctuation...but it was meant to be a rush of feeling and a sudden stop...to create intensity...but maybe that didn't work and i will reconsider..
|| Posted on 2011-05-03 13:04:40 | by jacoberin - [ Reply to This ] -|
jacob here...sorry...for some reason i missed that you were writing lyrics...i was thinking poem when i talked about the cutting...you are right..as a song you probably need to keep most of it intact...
and it is smooth and musical...
|| Posted on 2011-05-03 13:01:25 | by jacoberin - [ Reply to This ] -|
I loved your comments...they were nakedly honest. It is a quality I respect and appreciate. I felt that if I added more I would damage it.
I will look into expanding. Tks. PS: The poem was Candle Light
|| Posted on 2010-03-11 23:38:14 | by CaramelCandy - [ Reply to This ] -|
hey id like to give a belated thank-you for your kind words on "Backing Up." Theyre much appreciated. Please if you submit any new entries and would like a comment, ask me and I'll be right over to your page to give you a good one. Thanks a bunches.
|| Posted on 2009-12-23 05:02:20 | by SincerWritinAsh - [ Reply to This ] -|