Thank you very much for your feedback. I understand that alot of people don't understand the inspiration i find from sex. But I feed off of extreme emotion. And the moments i feel the most passionate is during sex. Thats the only passion I have been feeling as of late. But as well if you read into that poem it's more about being people being fake and how no matter how much attention you get for a few moments.... you won't be remembered in the end.
Hello, I am Nicodemous Pagee (not really, but that's all you get). Rather than comment on your pieces individually I thought I would leave you an overall synopsis here.
Your work as a whole is very well done. I am not a huge fan of prose most of the time, yours though is pretty good.
Your work is deep not in its actual execution, but on a personal level. That is what I think makes it good. The recurring theme seems to be one of fear and self loathing. The self loathing I can relate to on a personal level. I do always wonder the source. It is apparent from your pic that you are a beautiful young woman. It is hard for someone like me to understand why.
I am not a good looking man. I am rejected at every turn. For me to hate myself makes some sense in a sick way. I have found that a lot of people seem to feel the same way. I can relate to your work, and I love it, but I can never fully understand it.
That may be a good place for you to go. Both for yourself and for farther improvement of your work. Deal with the question at hand. Why? Where do your feeling steam from? Exploring this may offer you some insight into your own psyche, and give you some interesting places to go with you writing. Perhaps add even more depth to your work.
Thanks for stopping by the other day to check out my work. I would like to note that my latest stuff is not so good. My earliest stuff on this site is much better.
P.S. Yes, I am aware that by commenting here I am not upping my "stats", this ain't the first time, it won't be the last. That isn't what this is suppose to be about. One of the problems with this site.
Hi ya and thanks for the comment.... it would be a bit hard to describe the drinking.. as I sort of wrote it off the cuff.. after drinking... that night... and I really didn't remembering writing at all.... until the next day, when I logged in and saw it sitting there... and thought OH Shit what have I typed out now... and it was with a little trepidation that I opened to the page and at least was slightly relieved at what I read .... but thanks all the same Melissa